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Some shops are open 24 hours a day and 7 days a week. Do you think it is a good thing for customers, the shop staff and the economy as a whole?

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My interest in
traveling
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 came from my love of
airplanes
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aeroplanes
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. When I started earning my first money, I decided that I definitely want to fly somewhere. At that time, my family always had open Schengen visas and it wasn’t difficult to go to
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Europe spontaneously. My first independent trip was
Spain
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to Spain
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. I chose
this
 country for the infinite sandy beaches and Gaudi architecture in Barcelona. One day I bought air tickets, booked accommodation beside the sea and started to wait
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summer vacation after the end of the academic year at the university. When I arrived in
Spain
,
this
 country impressed me
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 sunny weather and transport infrastructure. I was amazed that trains in Barcelona go underground like a subway so don’t cross car traffic. But most of all I remember that
Spain
 became the world football champion
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this
 year. And I remember the whole hotel sitting in front of the TV to watch the matches and
then
 they ran like crazy to the street to celebrate
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. It was a lot of fun and huge. Since
then
 I fell in love with
Spain
 and went there 4 more times to visit other regions of
this
 inviting country.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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