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My interest in

traveling

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came from my love of

airplanes

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aeroplanes

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. When I started earning my first money, I decided that I definitely want to fly somewhere. At that time, my family always had open Schengen visas and it wasn’t difficult to go to

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Europe spontaneously. My first independent trip was

Spain

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to Spain

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. I chose

this

country for the infinite sandy beaches and Gaudi architecture in Barcelona. One day I bought air tickets, booked accommodation beside the sea and started to wait

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summer vacation after the end of the academic year at the university. When I arrived in

Spain

this

country impressed me

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sunny weather and transport infrastructure. I was amazed that trains in Barcelona go underground like a subway so don’t cross car traffic. But most of all I remember that

Spain

became the world football champion

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this

year. And I remember the whole hotel sitting in front of the TV to watch the matches and

then

they ran like crazy to the street to celebrate

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. It was a lot of fun and huge. Since

then

I fell in love with

Spain

and went there 4 more times to visit other regions of

this

inviting country.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

200 words

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Some shops are open 24 hours a day and 7 days a week. Do you think it is a good thing for customers, the shop staff and the economy as a whole?

Include an introduction and conclusion

People find it difficult to speak in front of the public or to give a presentation. How important is to speak well in public. Do you think children at school should be taught public speaking?

obesity has become an issue in some Western countries, especially among children. What are the reasons behind, and what effects does it have on individuals' life

"The internet has transformed the way we communicate and interact with each other. To what extent do you agree or disagree?"

Some people believe that young people should spend their time with family, rather than go to entertainment activities outsides the house. Some disagree. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification.