The line chart shows trends in terms of employment in the USA in millions and predictions for the future.

The line chart shows trends in terms of employment in the USA in millions and predictions for the future.
The line chart details the number of individuals working in manufacturing, services, and
agriculture
over a 50-year period in the United States. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that
agriculture
has and will continue to decline greatly from being the most to least common occupation,
while
the opposite is true for service jobs. The trend for manufacturing is less consistent though it is anticipated to be roughly stable
overall
. In 1975, the vast majority of
workers
(60
million
) were farmers, a figure in stark contrast to those in manufacturing (9
million
) and
agriculture
(10
million
). After a two-year period with little change for all jobs, there was a steep decline in the number of agricultural
workers
to 42
million
by 1979. In the same year, the data for service
workers
began to rise consistently, with an expected peak of 90
million
by 2025. In comparison,
workers
in
agriculture
have fallen at varying rates and the final statistic is anticipated to be just over 10
million
by 2025. The number for manufacturing rose to 40
million
in 1980,
where
Correct word choice
when
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the figures for all categories converged, before a rapid decline that will continue to 2025 and end at 10
million
.
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