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Some people believe that a visitor to country should follow local custom and tradition while other believe that host country should respect the cultural differences Discuss both these view and give your own opinion

#people #visitor #country #custom #tradition #host #respect #differences
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Tourism
is became
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 a kind of attraction to the
country
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 with lots of profits in
development
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the development
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, as the
people
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come
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who come
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 from other countries should respect
withrespect
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with respect
 to their cultures was
suggestion
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a suggestion
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 given by some
people
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 and others
like
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 they should follow
according to
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 local
traditional
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tradition
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.
As
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 research studies,
people
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 were visiting more
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 comparing beyond the decades . The upcoming paragraphs provided views about
challenges
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 ongoing
on
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visitors
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.
Firstly
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, each
country
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 should respect the tourist as they come to their own city. Generally, in the village or a rural area as the guest arrived at their location, local communities intimate them to wear traditional costumes with local accessories
inorder
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 to specialise the importance of their culture to
visitors
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. Even though they face a language gap among all, still these
people
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 explain
through
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 providing things freely to understand the heritage. Sometimes the
visitors
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 might accept the reality but few felt to
be bit
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 uncomfortable.
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, it is quite embracing the moment.
Secondly
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, each individual
are
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 responsible for making
visitors
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to
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apply
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be happy as they
leaving
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leave
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 the
country
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. We shouldn't discriminate
as well as
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 disappoint them by means of culture and respect. The Government or a private company should appoint a
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 guide to understand
through
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by means of explaining the nature of circumstances
though
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apply
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that
make
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 them realty of
country
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 customs.
Tourist
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Tourists
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 were
high
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a high
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 beneficiary
product
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products
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 for
financial
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 development of the states.
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, every individual shouldn't discourage their attitude as they
visits
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visit
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to
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our place. In conclusion,
the
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external
people
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 never be unhappy as they come
at
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in
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 any
forms
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form
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 of style. We have to encourage and support them as they are
guest
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guests
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 of our nation.
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