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One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think the causes are? What solutions can you suggest?

#city #traffic #congestion
Nowadays,
traffic
jams
 are one of the most vexing problems that city dwellers face in megacities.
Traffic
jams
 are mostly caused by the growing number of private
automobiles
 and narrow roads, which can be fixed by raising taxes and increasing the roadway size. Generally speaking, there are two main reasons for
traffic
 congestion. Perhaps the first reason is that people own too many private
cars
.
In other words
, most people prefer to drive their private vehicles around
instead
 of taking the bus or train because it's more convenient to travel
as well as
 they can get access to their own car anytime.
As a result
, there are many
cars
 on the
road
. The
further
 cause of
this
 trouble is the narrow street. If the
road
 is narrow there will be less space for vehicles to move or overtake which can cause
traffic
jams
. A possible solution to the issue is that the government should increase the price of private
automobiles
. If the government raises the price of private
automobiles
, it will be difficult to acquire one.
As a result
, fewer
automobiles
 will be purchased, and there will be fewer
car
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cars
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 on the
road
. If there are only a few
car
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cars
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 on the street, the
traffic
 will decrease. Another way to address
this
 issue is that the government should increase the street's size. If vehicles can move easily, there will be less chance of
traffic
jams
. To summarize, the main causes of the obstacle are an increase in the number of private
cars
 and narrow roads.
Although
this
 trouble is alarming, it can be solved by increasing the price of private
cars
 and expanding the
road
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urban population
  • public transportation
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • economic strength
  • consumerism
  • car ownership
  • commuting
  • peak hours
  • public transit
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing
  • remote work
  • flexible working hours
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion charges
  • traffic management systems
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