The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevan

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevan
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The pie charts give information about how the workers spend their time in various activities in a particular country in a half a century.
Overall
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, it is clear the work was still the largest segment in the two charts with an increase in it. accompanied by increasing in it all.
Firstly
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, the majority of the time every 2 years goes to the top 2 where are working and sleeping were 33% and 32% in 1958.
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, working had slight growth of 42%.
on the
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decreased the rate of sleeping by about 7% in 2008.
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,increases in other for details, travel to work from 2% upward to fourfold in 2008.
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, relaxing at home and playing sports or other those figures rose to 13% and 8% respectively ( from 8% and 6%).
otherwise
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, going out accounted for 19% in 1958 fell to 6%
at the end
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of the period and hit the low point.
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