The line graph below shows the relationship between crime and age in the UK in the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
The chart reveals the way in which
age
and crime have been related in 2002 in the UK. The line graph deals with ages between 0-60.
The first thing we can notice is the fact that the crime rate remains steady from the age
of 0 to 8, so it tells us that kids below 8 years old never committed illicit.
Then
, the crime level starts slightly rising and it strongly increases from the age
of twelve by the
65%. The graph keeps rising and it reaches its peak at the age
of 20,
when the rate
is 80%. From the highest point, it begins its decline: from the Remove the comma
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age
of 20 to 28 the percentage decreases by the
65%. The level continues to reduce itself, dropping below Correct article usage
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the
10% for people over 60s.
In conclusion, from the Correct article usage
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it is clear that
the majority of the illegal actions of last
year in the UK have been committed by young people between 12-28, while
the level of offences of adults is considerably lower. Although
, the age
group who committed the less criminal acts is the one that goes from 0 to 8 years old.Submitted by aliceterreno on
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