Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

It is believed by many
people
that television and computer
games
which
shows
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violence
has
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an adverse effect,
while
others think that it has a remarkable impact on
people
's behaviour. I agree with the former belief. Nowadays many
people
, especially youngsters are watching violent movies, which has a lasting effect on them. In most cases, adolescence imitates the actions they see in these movies because they are
immature
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to understand the fact, which is proven dangerous to society.
Moreover
, there are a lot of
games
, which have violent content.
For instance
, the Bule Whale game had spread like a disease and it is the reason for the death of thousands of
people
. That's why, the majority of
people
opine that the game or movie which provides violent content is fatal for the community.
On the contrary
, watching
violence
in movies or video
games
makes
people
assume that it is completely normal.
For example
,
people
who consume loads of violent content tend to be less sympathetic toward victims of
violence
, because they may be too tolerant of it and it is easy for them to accept. Another reason for
people
to support that
violence
has an important effect is that it relieves our stress and helps
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us
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to lead a relieved life. To illustrate
this
, a recent survey comments that, playing
games
which include a battle with other
people
relieves our anger and depression.
To conclude
, from the above arguments, in my perspective, if
people
get comfortable and habituated to watching cruelty and try to copy it,
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it will bring disaster for the whole community
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task response
Provide a clear and balanced argument identifying the different perspectives on the issue.
coherence cohesion
Ensure logical progression of ideas and use cohesive devices to connect points and sentences.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pivotal
  • desensitize
  • catalyst
  • predisposed
  • harmless outlet
  • distinguish
  • controlled environments
  • empirical research
  • minimal or no direct correlation
  • socio-economic status
  • predisposition
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