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The graph below shows the regional household recycling rates in the UK, France and Germany from the years 2005-2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the regional household recycling rates in the UK, France and Germany from the years 2005-2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph shows the trends of household recycling rates locally in UK, France and
Germany
 from 2005 to 2015.
Overall
, the recycling rates in UK and
Germany
 had a
rise
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rising
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 trend through these years. On the counterpart, the past decade witnessed a
dramatically
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dramatic
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 decrease
rates
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in rates
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 in France.
To begin
 with, France contributed the highest
rate
 in 2005, which was 50%.
However
, the
rate
 decreased significantly and got the same amount
with
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as
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UK
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the UK
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 in 2009.
This
decrease
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decreasing
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 trend stopped
until
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in
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 2013,
then
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and then
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 it started to rise quickly, which was 10% between 2013 to 2015.
Although
Germany
 used to take the lowest proportion in 2005(20%), the recycling
rate
 soared and reached 40% in 2010, which is the UK’s
rate
 in 2009.
Then
 the
rate
of
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in
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Germany
 reached
the
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its
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 peak in 2015(58%). UK’s recycling
rate
also
 has a developed rise, but it remains steady at 40% between 2007 to 2009. After
that
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,that
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 the
rate
 rose to 60% in 2015.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words germany, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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