The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the graph below provides information about
consumption
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the consumption
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of energy in the United States of America in the period of 1980 to 2030 with projections. as can be seen in 1980 petrol and oil had the highest
quadrillion
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with 35,
whereas
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the lowest
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unit had solar/wind,
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since 2000, it did increase and since that the lowest
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unit has hydropower, it has a little less than 5
quadrillion
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. in 1980 nuclear had a little less than 5
quadrillion
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however
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after its increasing it has more than 5
quadrillion
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. As it is shown in
this
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graph the original
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of natural gas used to be 20
however
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it decreased
then
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increased and
finally
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after that it is unchanged,
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Coal originally had more or less 15
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but
due to
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its rising in 2030 it will have roughly 30
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, and hydropower in 2030 will have the lowest
quadrillion
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Vocabulary: Replace the words quadrillion, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "a little less than" was used 2 times.
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