The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the graph below provides information about
consumption
of energy in the United States of America in the period of 1980 to 2030 with projections.
as can be seen in 1980 petrol and oil had the highest Correct article usage
the consumption
quadrillion
units
with 35, whereas
the lowest quadrillion
unit had solar/wind, however
since 2000, it did increase and since that the lowest quadrillion
unit has hydropower, it has a little less than 5 quadrillion
units
. in 1980 nuclear had a little less than 5 quadrillion
units
however
after its increasing it has more than 5 quadrillion
units
. As it is shown in this
graph the original quadrillion
units
of natural gas used to be 20 however
it decreased then
increased and finally
after that it is unchanged, while
Coal originally had more or less 15 quadrillion
units
but due to
its rising in 2030 it will have roughly 30 quadrillion
units
, and hydropower in 2030 will have the lowest quadrillion
units
.Submitted by lilit_margaryan2006 on
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