The maps below show the changes that occured to a town named Willington in 1780, 1860, and 2000.

The maps below show the changes that occured to a town named Willington in 1780,  1860, and 2000.
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three periods of development of a town, called Willington in the years
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1780, 1860, and 2000. Excluding the
river
, other facilities had a big change, especially the removal of farms and woods but
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in housing areas, road infrastructure,
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and educational conveniences.
As a result
, it seems that Willington became more modern and convenient through the periods. By looking at the maps, we can conclude that the
river
remained unspoiled from the north to the south of the Western side, but a new crossing bridge was built in the middle of the
river
from west to east. In 2000, a big wetland was published to feed the birds with an object to attract visitors at the southern of the
river
. At the same time, many shops were opened along the east bank of the
river
to the south.
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half of the farms in the
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decreased in 1860, and
then
it was totally cleared out. On other hand,
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the northeast corner, the number of households witnessed a dramatic rising trend, at 200 and 500 greatly.
In addition
, the forest was cut down a lot in 1860, and after
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it was removed to make way for the appearance of two schools and three sports courts. Noticeably, the accommodation area was linked with the
river
and the schooling zone with two straight roads.
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