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In today’s very competitive world, a worker has to possess multiple skills to succeed. Among the skills that a worker should possess, which skill do you think is more important, social skills or good qualifications? Explain the reasons and provide specific examples to support your answer.

In current days, people need to have multiple abilities for success in their workplace.
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, it helps to be valuable in the profession in which you are working at the moment.
Although
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 there are requirements for specialized abilities
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 as social mastery and qualification respectively.
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, I opine that only good qualifications will be valuable in
this
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 world.
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 with, nowadays most workers ought to
attend
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have
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 good qualifications in crucial spheres like
machines
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machine
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 technology or cyber security.
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, some statistics show that a lot of people can not get workplaces in companies with high salaries, because the world always changes in that case, workers need specialized competence to adapt and to be useful,
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 why there is importance in improving masteries to survive. it is often argued that a community with social skills will be replaced by robots completely in the future,
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,
it is clear that
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 robots cannot easily discuss with people even though the development of artificial intelligence already tries to do that. If it goes,
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 there will be no need for psychology or
cashier
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, and now it
would
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 be a matter of time before society will rely on them. Taking everything into consideration, it can be concluded that there is big significance in good qualifications and there is no doubt that social skills will be less needed in
near
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 future.

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task response
Make sure your introduction clearly addresses the question and states your opinion. The first sentence is good, but it could be clearer if you stated that social skills are less important than qualifications.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the flow of ideas. Use linking words (like 'firstly', 'secondly', 'finally') to show connections between your points.
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Provide clearer examples to support your ideas. For instance, explain more how qualifications lead to better job opportunities.
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You identified an important point about changes in technology affecting jobs.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion summarizes your main point well.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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