The graph below shows food consumption in Australia between 1950 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

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illustrate

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that meals consume in Australia from 1950 to 2010 and

comparison

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a comparison

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during those years.

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clear that

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the consumption

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rate show for the AUSTRALIA three

differences

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in foods

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foods

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food

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a over

period

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periods

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of 50 years. Pizza and hamburgers proportion enormously increase but there was

significatly

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significantly

decrease fish and chips.

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the graph

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compare

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3 groups at

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different time and gives information about

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enjoyments

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enjoyment

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. In 1975, the consumption percentage have substantial growth

pizza

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in pizza

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and hamburgers to 1985 and 1990 respectively.

Then

hamburgers slightly rose from 1985 to 1995 and reach a hundred.

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pizza

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hit a peak

just

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of just

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over eighty

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and thus

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stay to constant from 1995 until 2000.

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fish in 1975 high level of

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until

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1980.

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this

period

flucluate

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fluctuate

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interest

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in 1980

have

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started

gradualy

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gradually

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climb

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climbing

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to 1985

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the next

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period

time

steady

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a steady

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drop rate

just

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of just

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under

fourty

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forty

four

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