The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012. Summarise information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012. Summarise information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The graph demonstrates the portion in
gender
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the gender
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of academic
staff
in 7 faculties of a specific university in 2012. In general, in most faculties, the percentage of female
staff
is higher than the one of male
staff
. It can be seen clearly that most of
female
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staff
participates
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in the
faculty
of engineering
with
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85%.
In contrast
, there is only 25% of
staff
decides
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to join the education
faculty
, which
remain
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at the lowest place.
Faculty
of Science, Business and Law follow with the
relatively
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amount of
staff
joined, at around 60%. The percentage of joining the
faculty
of Medicine records at 49%.
From
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the other side,
Education
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faculty
witnesses the highest percentage of male
staff
taking part
in
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with 72%. There is 58% of male
staff
joins
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the Arts
faculty
. The
faculty
of medicine only draws half of
male
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the male
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staff
. The Business and Science
faculty
record the nearly same amount of
man
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men
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who
like
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to join, at 35% and 38% respectively. Engineering
Faculty
stays at the lowest place with only 18% of
staff
deciding to take part
in
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apply
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.
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