The bar chart below shows percentages of three groups of Australian children taking part in four kinds of activities in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar graph details the preferences of four types of leisure activities among Australian

children

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in three groups in the year 2012. Looking from an

overall

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perspective, it is readily apparent that watching

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was the most popular

activity

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chosen by all teenagers. Reading, doing art and riding the bike

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less common options for kids from 5 to 16 years. Specifically, there was a positive correlation between increases

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ages

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age

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and the percentage of

children

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who would watch

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in their spare time. Watching

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also

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apparently the most popular

activity

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among

children

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. More or less 90% of them chose to watch

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when they have time.

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, doing artwork was considered the least common

activity

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selected by

children

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for all age groups, which

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lower than 60%. For reading, no significant difference was seen among the three age groups, and the figures stayed over 60%. In comparison, the figures for 12 to 16 years old

children

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saw the highest rate which merely reached 80%, and

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was around 10% higher than that of the 9 to

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age group who anticipate the same

activity

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

189 words

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Rising university fees and scarce employment prospects for graduates have led some people to say that universities should not teach arts subjects, like philosophy and history, and only offer practical degree courses that maximise chances of employment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?