The bar chart below shows percentages of three groups of Australian children taking part in four kinds of activities in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The bar graph details the preferences of four types of leisure activities among Australian

children

in three groups in the year 2012. Looking from an

overall

perspective, it is readily apparent that watching

was the most popular

activity

chosen by all teenagers. Reading, doing art and riding the bike

was

Correct subject-verb agreement

were

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less common options for kids from 5 to 16 years. Specifically, there was a positive correlation between increases

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ages

Fix the agreement mistake

age

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and the percentage of

children

who would watch

in their spare time. Watching

also

apparently the most popular

activity

among

children

. More or less 90% of them chose to watch

when they have time.

By contrast

, doing artwork was considered the least common

activity

selected by

children

for all age groups, which

were

Correct subject-verb agreement

was

show examples

lower than 60%. For reading, no significant difference was seen among the three age groups, and the figures stayed over 60%. In comparison, the figures for 12 to 16 years old

children

saw the highest rate which merely reached 80%, and

this

was around 10% higher than that of the 9 to

11 year

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11-year

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age group who anticipate the same

activity

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Vocabulary: Replace the words children, tv, activity with synonyms.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

189 words

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