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Some people think that school children need to learn practical skills such as car maintenance or bank account management along with the academic subjects at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #school #children #skills #car #maintenance #bank #account #management #subjects
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competetive
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competitive
 nature and environment. It is true that
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 some people believe that pupils should focus on
problem solving
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skills
 ,
such
 as automobile care and financial account management, as a lecture in their
cirriculum
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curriculum
. I totally
agree
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this
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this
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prons.
First,
car
maintanence
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maintenance
 or financial management of bank accounts are daily activities which are highly important for students'
budget
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.
Another
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 practical
skills
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 that
beneficial
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 for owners are cooking and fixing basic electronic devices. These
skills
 affect positively
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 budget of students or people with low income.
For instance
, cooking your own food at home, meal preparation for school or outdoor activities, bring your own coffee for
studing
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studying
 in the library will gradually increase your savings and financial status.
Secondly
,
problem solving
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problem-solving
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 actions like money
managing
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management
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, car maintenance or cooking assist in
systematic
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a systematic
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 approach to tasks and
homeworks
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homework
 which are important for
academic
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career
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 and scientific
researches
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.
For example
, lots of
lectureres
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lecturers
lectures
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 The University of Toronto have
a
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different hobbies,
such
 as cooking or fixing electronic devices, that improve their
problem solving
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skills
 and
also
 time management. In conclusion, some of the hobbies,
such
 as meal preparation, cooking, fixing devices or even car maintenance, are developing practical
skills
 which are beneficial for pupils. I strongly agree that practical
skills
 are important for their career, savings and financial status.
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