The chart below compares the percentage of time Australian mothers and fathers spent helping their children with four activities in 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below compares the percentage of time Australian mothers and fathers spent helping their children with four activities in 2013.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart compares the percentage of time Australian mothers and fathers spent helping their children with four activities in 2013.
It is clear that
there was an increase in the proportion of time mothers
dressing
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dressed
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with their kids in Australia
while
the number of
father
dressing was lower than
mother
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mothers
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. The percentage of both of them was 5%. In homework, there was 60%
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of mother
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mother
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mothers
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doing
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do
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homework and 30%
father
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of father
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.
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do.
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Playing games with
father
Correct article usage
the father
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reached
at
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apply
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60% but
mother
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the mother
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fell to 25%.
In contrast
both of
them
Correct pronoun usage
their
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rate
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rates
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peaked at 30%. Australian
mother
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mothers
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still decreased to 45% in preparing for
children
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children's
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bed
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beds
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and
father
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fathers
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dropped to 50%. The percentage of two of them preparing for bed went down
under
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by under
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5%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 93%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words father, mother with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compares" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • time spent
  • Australian mothers
  • fathers
  • helping
  • children
  • activities
  • reading
  • homework
  • playing sports
  • general play
  • comparison
  • 2013
  • significantly
  • difference
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