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You want to rent out a small apartment to a family, and you have decided to advertise it. Write a letter to the editor of a local newspaper asking to advertise your ad on the front page of the newspaper. In your letter, give details of the ad that you want to publish mention that you want the ad to be published on the front page say how you would like to pay for the advertisement Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

#rent #apartment #editor #newspaper #ad #front #page #advertisement #sir #madam
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Dear Sir or Madam, I am Jenny Shroff living at
the
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Melborne street in Kitchener. I came to know about your local but extremely well known and valuable newspaper in our city. I am writing
this
 letter to let you know that I am interested to have my house to let
advertisement
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 in your
news paper
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newspaper
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. I have one flat in
the
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Kenipel street which is fully furnished. It has 2
Bedroom
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 attached bathroom,
living
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a living
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 room, one kitchen and a powder room. I would like to rent it to a small family which includes maximum
4
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members.
Thus
, requesting you to include all mentioned points.
Along with
 that could you please mention all the amenities too which I have added
in
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 the attached list which
apartment
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 provides
.
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Also
, don't forget to add my personal mobile phone number and email address.
Therefore
, interested people can directly contact me.
Moreover
, irrespective of its size publish
this
 ad on the front page of
paper
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 to have maximum views. After publishing my advertisement share your invoice with me and do let me know the mode of payment. Not only I can immediately
sent
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cheque
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 but
also
 I can deposit it in your bank account on the same day. I hope to hear from you soon. Yours Faithfully, Jenny shroff
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • I am writing to inquire about the possibility of advertising
  • currently have a small apartment available for rent
  • The apartment is located in a convenient and safe neighborhood
  • It consists of
  • The ad should include
  • I kindly request that the ad be placed on the front page
  • I would like to discuss the payment options
  • Thank you for considering my request
  • I look forward to hearing from you
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