The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the amount of utilizing
water
in the world divided into three sectors between 1900 and 2000,
while
the table provides information about the intensity of
water
consumption
in
Brazil
and Congo in 2000.
Overall
, worldwide
water
use
experienced an upward trend, where the agricultural sector required the highest proportion of
water
during the period.
Brazil
consumed
water
more than Congo
due to
its high population and
water
consumption
per person, and large irrigated land. Stood at about 500 km3 in the beginning, the amount of global
water
used by agriculture increased moderately in the next forty years, reaching almost 1000 km3, before it had a significant growth until the end of the period, peaking at 3000 km3.
However
, the proportion of
water
in industrial
use
and domestic
use
remained stable at about under 200 km3 in the first half of the period.
Then
, the need for
water
in the industrial sector rose by almost 1000 km3
while
that of household
use
doubled in 2000. Regarding
water
consumption
,
Brazil
had 176 million inhabitants with 359 m3 of
water
consumption
per person and required 26,500 km2 for agricultural land.
In contrast
, the Democratic Republic of Congo had few of
population
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populations
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than
Brazil
, accounting for 5,2 million with 8 m3 of
water
consumption
per person and consuming 100 km2 for irrigated land.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, consumption, brazil, use, km with synonyms.
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