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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the amount of utilizing
water
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 in the world divided into three sectors between 1900 and 2000,
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 the table provides information about the intensity of
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consumption
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 in
Brazil
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 and Congo in 2000.
Overall
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, worldwide
water
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use
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 experienced an upward trend, where the agricultural sector required the highest proportion of
water
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 during the period.
Brazil
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 consumed
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 more than Congo
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 its high population and
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consumption
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 per person, and large irrigated land. Stood at about 500 km3 in the beginning, the amount of global
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 used by agriculture increased moderately in the next forty years, reaching almost 1000 km3, before it had a significant growth until the end of the period, peaking at 3000 km3.
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, the proportion of
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 in industrial
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 and domestic
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 remained stable at about under 200 km3 in the first half of the period.
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, the need for
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 in the industrial sector rose by almost 1000 km3
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 that of household
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 doubled in 2000. Regarding
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consumption
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,
Brazil
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 had 176 million inhabitants with 359 m3 of
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consumption
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 per person and required 26,500 km2 for agricultural land.
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, the Democratic Republic of Congo had few of
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populations
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 than
Brazil
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, accounting for 5,2 million with 8 m3 of
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consumption
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 per person and consuming 100 km2 for irrigated land.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, consumption, brazil, use, km with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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