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In 2017 when I got diagnosed with OCD, I felt like I have just got

this

problem recently, the truth when I looked back at my

life

carefully, I noticed that I always had

this

behaviour but it wasn’t disabling back

then

, I didn’t struggle from it as I did in 2017.

However

, once I knew what is my problem, I started my battle, every once in a

while

I came up with a new strategy to deal with my OCD but

this

plan soon fail, and I keep searching for another and so on. All my strategies to win

this

battle have given me a short relief but once the OCD start coming back I feel like am losing and once

this

feeling kicks in, it takes control because I keep thinking that I shouldn’t lose, and

this

is thanks to the concept of winning or losing. So, once it takes control, my

life

gets on hold, I get paralyzed and after days of darkness, I start searching for another strategy. And what I noticed is, the more strategies you came up with, the more painful the loss will be. What I discovered after a thorough search is that most of my struggle comes from setting goals and trying to achieve them and sometimes when I achieve them, I start to feel emptiness, I start to feel like am losing again. My

life

started to change once I learnt to have values rather than goals, as values encourage the concept of accepting and being mindful. Every human being throughout their

life

has suffered from some sort of psychological difficulties, some even with the same amount of distressing feelings and thoughts as a diagnosed psychiatric patient.

However

, even with the same amount of anxiety ,

for instance

. They managed to get through hard times and live their

life

efficiently. That’s because the line that separates normal anxiety from

life

-disabled anxiety is struggling. Which generates form the concept of winning or losing.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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2 paragraphs

330 words

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