The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria  between 1995 and 2005.
The line graph shows how much was spent in US dollars on books in four European countries between 1995 and 2005.
Overall
, people in Germany spent the most on reading materials during the entire period. It is
also
clear that despite some fluctuations, spending on books increased in all four places over the 10 years. German expenditure fluctuated between around $80
million
and about $90
million
between 1995 and 2003 before increasing to just under $100
million
in 2005. France was the only country that experienced a steady rise, with around $55
million
worth of books sold in 1995, about $70
million
in 2001, and
finally
just under $80
million
in 2005. The figure for Italy hovered at around $50
million
dollars until 1999
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when it steadily rose to just over $60
million
in 2005. Austrians spent approximately $30
million
in 1995, and
this
went up by around $10
million
over the next four years and remained stable for two years
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before it climbed dramatically to just above $70
million
in 2005.
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  • expenditure
  • fluctuate
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  • peak
  • trough
  • correlation
  • digital reading platforms
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