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The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

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The line graph shows how much was spent in US dollars on books in four European countries between 1995 and 2005.
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, people in Germany spent the most on reading materials during the entire period. It is
also
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 clear that despite some fluctuations, spending on books increased in all four places over the 10 years. German expenditure fluctuated between around $80
million
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 and about $90
million
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 between 1995 and 2003 before increasing to just under $100
million
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 in 2005. France was the only country that experienced a steady rise, with around $55
million
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 worth of books sold in 1995, about $70
million
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 in 2001, and
finally
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 just under $80
million
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 in 2005. The figure for Italy hovered at around $50
million
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 dollars until 1999
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 when it steadily rose to just over $60
million
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 in 2005. Austrians spent approximately $30
million
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 in 1995, and
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 went up by around $10
million
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 over the next four years and remained stable for two years
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 before it climbed dramatically to just above $70
million
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 in 2005.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • fluctuate
  • trend
  • peak
  • trough
  • correlation
  • digital reading platforms
  • socio-economic factors
  • initiatives
  • cultural influence
  • statistical data
  • purchasing habits
  • book industry
  • consumer spending
  • educational resources
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