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Nowadays, many people change jobs quite regularly, rather than working in the one company for their entire careers. Why do you think this is happening? How can companies keep their workers?

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Nowadays, many
people
 change jobs quite regularly, rather than working in
the
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one company for their entire careers. Why do you think
this
 is happening? How can companies keep their workers? In recent years, it is public knowledge
hat
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people
 switch their
occupation
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occupations
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 more frequently. They prefer to change their workplace every few years.
This
 essay will explain why
this
 behaviour arose and what employers can do to keep their employees. The primary reason is that
people
 are able to do that. Nowadays, almost everyone has an opportunity for a lucrative possession.
Hence
, if they aren't keen on
this
 profession, they will try their best and apply for another
job
, which maybe will give them better wages. Giving an example, if you are a
high quality
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 chef, you have plenty of options to find some other
job
 position. The fact that it is accessible to find new work, does not necessarily mean
that is
 good for companies. So what can an employer do?
Firstly
, companies should offer something.
People
 are always searching for jobs which give them benefits
such
 as good salaries and a pleasant atmosphere with
teamworkers
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team workers
. For females, it is necessary to have a long maternity leave. What is more, nowadays
people
 are not looking for a nine-to-five
job
 and they don’t want to get stuck behind
the
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 desk. All in all, money, acquaintances and
job
 promotions are essential for any employee. If they cannot get them, they leave their jobs. The labour market is extended,
thus
 finding a new occupation is not very hard.
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