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In some countries, most people prefer to rent a house rather than buy their houses. What are the advantages of renting a home? Should governments subsidies house prices for first home buyers?

#countries #people #rent #house #houses #home #governments #subsidies #prices #first #buyers
According to
 the question, most
of
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residents
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the residents
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 are accommodators rather than owners of houses mostly because of cheap accommodation renting
cost
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 and to avoid
taxes
 for
house
 owners.
Nevertheless
, I support
idea
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the idea
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 of financial help
by
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from
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government
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the government
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 to buy
first
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a first
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home
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homes
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 to reduce
number
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 of homeless individuals. In
the
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modern society where urbanization develops significantly,
due to
 the huge number of residential areas the price
for
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of
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 renting is now decreased
compare
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 to the
last
 10 years. Because,
when ever
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 there are demand is less than
number
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a number
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 of houses,
consequently
 price
for
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 renting decreases automatically in order to get at least minimal profit.
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, after
1960s
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 population of Tashkent experienced a strong earthquake,
then
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 about
million
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of
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new establishments were built for local
people
 for free,
consequently
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 there was the cheapest cost for renting which is
more
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a more
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 suitable option for
a
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living.
However
, from the ancient times of
human
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humans
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existing
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 here the regulations of
government
 to pay
taxes
 for own dwellings as a fraction of top brass.
That is
 the point, that financially educated
people
 live by renting
accomadation
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accommodation
 to keep away from extra chargers. In terms of youngsters and
people
 who have
a
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 desire to buy
own
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their own
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 dwelling place, ministers would act appropriately by financially
maintence
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maintenance
 them to minimize
a
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quantity
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 of unhoused inhabitants.
As a result
,
people
 who have a
house
 pay more
taxes
 and it is beneficial for residents
as well as
 for
government
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the government
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.
Due to
 the
sence
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sense
 of satisfaction which is gained by buying something expensive makes extra
paymets
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payments
payment
 less visible for
house
 owners.
To conclude
, renting houses is
beneficial
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a beneficial
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 method of living
,
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 since there is
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an existance
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existance
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existence
 of
taxes
,
however
 buying a new flat provides
own
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its own
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 profit for both
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the individual
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individual
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individuals
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 and
government
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the government
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, so
administration
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the administration
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 of
country
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the country
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 should help
for
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with
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 the first
house
 purchase.
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