The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart
indiacate
the alteration Correct your spelling
indicate
indicates
precentage
of Correct your spelling
percentage
people
in Australia
who were born in domestic and outside Australia
living
in urban, Correct word choice
and living
rural
and Correct word choice
and rural
town
between 1995 and 2010.
As can be seen from the graph, Fix the agreement mistake
towns
people
who were born in Australia
and outside Australia
in 1995 and 2010 most of them living in cities
. And in 2010, we can see that only few
Change the article
a few
people
who living
in Change the form of the verb
live
in
rural areas.
It is clear from the data that the majority of Remove the redundancy
apply
people
living in cities
are more than 50% in 1995 and 2010. Also
the Add a comma
,Also
people
who born
outside Add a missing verb
were born
Australia
who live
in Wrong verb form
lived
cities
are large
proportion in 1995 and 2010. Correct article usage
a large
In contrast
,people
born outside Australia
only got nearly 10% living in town
in 1995 .Add an article
a town
the town
On the other hand
, people
born outside Change preposition
of people
Australia
only has 5% living
in rural areas in 2010.
Wrong verb form
lived
To sum up
, either people
who were born in Australia
or pople
born outside Correct your spelling
people
Australia
loves
to live in Change the verb form
love
cities
, and rural areas drmatically
decreased Correct your spelling
dramatically
within
20% in 2010 from 1995.Change preposition
by
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