The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart
indiacate
the alteration Correct your spelling
indicate
indicates
precentage
of Correct your spelling
percentage
people
in Use synonyms
Australia
who were born in domestic and outside Use synonyms
Australia
Use synonyms
living
in urban, Correct word choice
and living
rural
and Correct word choice
and rural
town
between 1995 and 2010.
As can be seen from the graph, Fix the agreement mistake
towns
people
who were born in Use synonyms
Australia
and outside Use synonyms
Australia
in 1995 and 2010 most of them living in Use synonyms
cities
. And in 2010, we can see that only Use synonyms
few
Change the article
a few
people
who Use synonyms
living
in Change the form of the verb
live
in
rural areas.
It is clear from the data that the majority of Remove the redundancy
apply
people
living in Use synonyms
cities
are more than 50% in 1995 and 2010. Use synonyms
Linking Words
Also
the Add a comma
,Also
people
who Use synonyms
born
outside Add a missing verb
were born
Australia
who Use synonyms
live
in Wrong verb form
lived
cities
are Use synonyms
large
proportion in 1995 and 2010. Correct article usage
a large
In contrast
,Linking Words
people
born outside Use synonyms
Australia
only got nearly 10% living in Use synonyms
town
in 1995 .Add an article
a town
the town
On the other hand
, Linking Words
Use synonyms
people
born outside Change preposition
of people
Australia
only has 5% Use synonyms
living
in rural areas in 2010.
Wrong verb form
lived
To sum up
, either Linking Words
people
who were born in Use synonyms
Australia
or Use synonyms
pople
born outside Correct your spelling
people
Australia
Use synonyms
loves
to live in Change the verb form
love
cities
, and rural areas Use synonyms
drmatically
decreased Correct your spelling
dramatically
within
20% in 2010 from 1995.Change preposition
by
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, australia, cities with synonyms.
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