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The chart below gives some of the most reported issues among people living in UK cities in 2008 (%). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives some of the most reported issues among people living in UK cities in 2008 (%). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart reveals the
reported
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of
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three issues (health services, education and training,
air
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pollution
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) in 2008 among individuals staying in seven
cities
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 in the
UK
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, including Newcastle, Belfast, Birmingham, Cardiff, Manchester, Glasgow, and London.
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, it can be seen that the majority of
cities
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 in the
UK
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 had the highest problems
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 health
service
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services
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, which showed over 50%. Meanwhile,
air
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pollution
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 performed the lowest percentage, which reported only three
cities
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 showed over 10%. To start with, all of the
cities
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 in the
UK
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 showed over 50% in
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 of health services issues, except Glasgow, which indicated
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around 48%. Unfortunately, Belfast and Cardiff showed the highest percentages, which
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were closed
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closed
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 to 60%. In
term
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 of education and training, they experienced five
cities
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 indicating over 50%,
while
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 the
remain
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cities
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 showed 47% and 45% respectively. Regarding
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air
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the air
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pollution
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 issue, four
cities
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 in the
UK
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 (Newcastle, Belfast, Birmingham, and Glasgow) reported the percentage of
air
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pollution
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 was under 10%.
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, London, Manchester, and Cardiff performed over 10%.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollution, cities, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant issue
  • high percentage
  • real estate market
  • traffic congestion
  • transportation issues
  • urban areas
  • health services
  • dissatisfaction
  • healthcare facilities
  • crime rates
  • safety
  • law enforcement
  • education and employment issues
  • job market
  • educational systems
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