The first chart shows the population of England and Wales between 1700 and 2000. The second chart gives information about the birth and death rate in the same countried in the same period.
The first bar graph illustrates how the number of people in England and Wales changed over
Correct article usage
a 300-years
300-years
period of time Correct your spelling
300-year
whereas
the second chart gives data on birth and death rate
for the same countries and time period.
The population had increased gradually from 1700 to 2000 and from 1800 to 1900 the amount had more than doubled from around 16 million to 48 million Fix the agreement mistake
rates
whereas
over the next 100 years
the growth rate was comparatively less.
When it comes to the Add a comma
,years
amount
of people born and died, there can be seen rapid changes from 1700 to 2000. Both parameters had increased Change the quantifier
number
continously
up until 1800 Correct your spelling
continuously
where
Correct word choice
when
it
reached Correct pronoun usage
they
its
peak Correct pronoun usage
their
then
gradually decreased during next
200 years. In 2000, Correct article usage
the next
number
of deaths had reduced Change the article
the number
in
almost half Change preposition
by
comparing
to the number of births.Change the form of the verb
compared
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