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The chart below shows the total number of minutes(in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided intot three categories , from 1995-2002 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the total number of minutes(in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided intot three categories , from 1995-2002 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The chart shows the Total
minutes
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 (in billions) of telephone calls done by British people, which is divided into three categories over a seven-year period
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 mobile phone use has been increasing over the period, local call using fixed line was the most frequent. In 1995, about 71 billion
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 of the local call using the fixed line in the UK.
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 number increased
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 and reached its peak at 90 billion
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 per day in 1999. After that, the use of fixed lines for local calls dropped considerably over the
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 and reached the same number as in 1995. National and international calls using the fixed lines were the second-highest call that
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 people made in 1995. After that,
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 number continue to increase until the end of
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 and stood at 60.5 billion
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 in 2002.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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