The grap below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the changes in the share of the elderly over 65 years old from 1940 to 2040 in three
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proportion will increase in every country during the 100-year period, with the prediction of
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after 2020. Focusing first on the past 80 years, the USA ranked first at nearly 9%, followed by Sweden at 7%.
the proportion of these two countries had increased gradually until 1980, the share in Sweden surpassed that in the USA, which remained almost unchanged until 2020,
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the 1990s, continuing to rise to approximately 20% in 2020.
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, Japan followed a
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pattern from these two western countries, with its figure dropping slightly by 2% for the first 20 years, and
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steady at 3% in the next three decades. Moving on to estimation, what particularly stands out is a significant increase in Japan from 7% in 2020 to roughly four times that figure in 2040.
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two countries, the USA and Sweden, are
expected to see the largest rise between 2030 and 2040 by more than 5%, they are predicted to be overtaken by Japan in the middle and the latter half of the 2040s
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