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Paying all workers the same salary in a company promotes harmony and repect among colleagues To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#workers #salary #company #harmony #repect #colleagues
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giving
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 a salary to all range of workers the same isn't
gives
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 higher value in
a
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society.
Actually
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this
 essay going to discuss
about
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the topic with demerits. On the hand, when the job level and position of
job
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the job
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 decide the salary. When the chief officer
decide
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 to give
a
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money to all in the qual means definitely the employee will lose
their
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apply
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hope to work dedicated in the
company
.
For instance
, one hospital in
coimbatore
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 gives a salary to all people the same amount for more than years without
increament
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increasing
 the quality and quantity of the service reduced automatically.
On the other hand
, the
company
 gets to take
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most complicated decision that to set
annual
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an annual
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 package for
same
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the same
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 to all of them. Definitely it
spoil
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 the
company
's growth.
However
, in
COVID-19
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the COVID-19
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 situation the
company
 wants to give a fund to everyone even
they
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if they
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 are not working,
mean
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meanwhile
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while
 creates some
issue
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issues
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by
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with
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 paying
all
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apply
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.
To conclude
,
this
 essay covers the disadvantages of providing
the
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 equal amount to everyone.
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