The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

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of two different genders in various age groups who

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physically active in the year 2010.

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, it can be clearly seen that at the age of 15 to 24

women

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were more active compared to

men

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,

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Men

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in the following period of time were at the top in physical activity compared to

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. To commence with,

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from 15-24 years old have the highest proportion 52.8 in the chart who was physically fit

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cent while

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for

men

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was 47.7.

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,

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percentage

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was changed in the given year for each gender. People in the range of 25-34 have 42.2 per cent for

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and 48.9

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for the opposite gender.

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, from 35 to 64 years old the

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for

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was higher compared to

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with just above 50% but for ,

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the proportion was just under 40%.

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people who were 65 or over has

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almost the

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amount of

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in the year 2010.