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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages.
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These pie charts display the percentage of
students
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 who were able to speak different languages at one university in England in 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, there was 80 per
cent
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 of
students
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 could speak not just English at
this
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 university in 2000, the number kept increasing to 90 per
cent
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 in 2010. In 2000, 30 per
cent
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 of
students
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 could speak both Spanish and English, and
this
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 category increased to 35 when the time came to 2010. It can
also
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 be seen that
students
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 who were able to speak two other languages, and those who could speak another language were increasing in
this
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 decade too, from 10 per
cent
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 to 15 per
cent
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 and from 15 per
cent
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 to 20 per
cent
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.
In contrast
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, 15 per
cent
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 of
students
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 were able to speak French in 2000,
while
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 10 years later the proportions slightly decreased to 10 per
cent
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. The proportion of
students
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 who speak German and English didn’t change in the survey, it was always kept at 10 per
cent
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.
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