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The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart indicates how many men and
women
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 in Britain enrolled in
further
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 education in three periods - 1970/71, 1980/81, and 1990/91 - and whether their studies were full or part-time.
Overall
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, there were more men and
women
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 studying full-time than part-time in all periods.
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,
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 the number of males in terms of full-time education experienced a moderate fluctuation, the volume of females studying all types of courses increased significantly. A deep analysis of the bar chart provided reveals that there was a considerable climb in the male figure for part-time schooling, from around 100 000 in 1970/71 to approximately 200 000 in 1990/91. The number of
women
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 studying in
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 way
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 saw a steep growth from 1970/71 to 1990/91, at nearly 40 000 and 200 000 respectively. From the figures, it can be inferred that there was a dramatic rise in the figure of
women
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 choosing to enrol on
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full-time learning, with the figure climbing from 700 000 to 1.1 million over a 20-year period.
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, men in terms of the full-time category fluctuated gradually, dropping from 1 million to about 800 000 between 1970/71 and 1980/81, and
then
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 rising again to nearly 900 000 in 1990/91.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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