Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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It is a widely held view that getting a university degree is the right path

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achieving a good job.

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, some people believe that practical experience is far more important. In

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both sides of the statement will be discussed and my opinion will be provided. It is believed that

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degrees have

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respect among

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and they are likely to be chosen.

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why the majority goes

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universities, colleges and other schools. It happens because it is easier to hire a person, who knows the job or

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least

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of fast learning, than an uneducated one, who needs to study 3-4 years

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within a month.

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students participate in different kinds of workshops,

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or bond with

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various networking meetings. Afterwards, awards are written in special after-graduating lists, which

subsequently

are handed to the hiring managers.

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better decision than getting a skilled worker. In detail, there are spheres where

experience

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takes a significant advantage

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education. In

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diplomatic talk, power of leadership or

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ability

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fast decisions, practical knowledge wins. It means no matter how educated

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is, he may be standing still when a serious obstacle approaches.

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is the reason why nowadays courses, soft skills programs,

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are widely used

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of university. Getting high-qualified education is valued for finding a good job.

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, to continue work person needs to develop other skills, which include practical experience. I assume it is important to reach success

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both

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9Linking words
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0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas.

in some countries around the world men and women are having babies late in life. what are the reasons? do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people believe that people who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foriegn language at primary school rather than secondary school. do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?