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You have lost an item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter describe the item explain where and when you left it say what action you would like the company to take You do NOT need to write any addresses.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to inform you about the loss of a valuable item on one of your trains. On Sunday,
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 15, I was
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travelling
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 from London to Manchester on
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train number E95.
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arrival
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on
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Manchester
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the Manchester
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stantion
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station
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 discover that
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 had lost my laptop in a green case. I think that I can
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 it on the top shelf
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 the railway where I was travelling.
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 laptop is
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 valuable to me as it contains personal and work data. I hope that you can find
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returned
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to
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 me. I have already contacted
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the train
coductors
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conductors
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 in Manchester,and they have recommended
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 reached
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 support service.
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in
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 the camera recording, or in
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servise
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service
 lost and found department. I'm attaching a copy of the train ticket and my personal information. I hope for a positive outcome. Thank you for your attention. Sincerely, Vitaliy.
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