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The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the proportion of
women
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 who are enrolled in senior
management
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 in several
companies
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 in 40 years (from 1975 to 2015).
Overall
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, Eldan
Ltd
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 shows the highest
percentage
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 of participation of
women
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 in senior
management
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 meanwhile, Finsbury
Ltd
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 displays the lowest
percentage
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. In 1975, Finsbury
Ltd
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 showed the highest
percentage
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 of
women
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 who were enrolled in senior
management
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 between the other two
companies
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 with 16%,
this
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trend
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 fluctuated over time with a 2% drop in 1980, followed by a slight rise till 1990 with 22%.
Although
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 in 2000 the
percentage
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 of
this
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 company dropped to 20%, in 2015 it increased to 26%.
Therefore
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,
this
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trend
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 occupies the
last
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 place between Eldan
Ltd
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 and Bamforth
Ltd
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companies
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.
On the contrary
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,
although
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 Eldan
Ltd
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 showed the lowest
percentage
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 of
women
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 who were enrolled in senior
management
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 with 3% from 1975 to 1980, the
percentage
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 of
this
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trend
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 went up to 14% in 1985,
then
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 in the next five years it was doubled to 28% and increased noticeably in 2000 and 2015 with 33% and 64% respectively, which managed to make
this
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trend
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 the leader between other
companies
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, management, companies, ltd, percentage, trend with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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