The graphs show percentage of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs show percentage of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphs give some information about the frequency of mobile phone owners using seven different features in 2006, 2008, and 2010. In 2006, 100 people were using their mobile phones to make calls, and the number of them remained stable in 2008 and 2010(100 and 99 respectively). Sending and receiving text messages was the second most popular choice in the same year and experienced a slight increase to 75 and 79 in 2010. Taking phones shared the same trend with it, rising from 66 to 71 in two years and
finally
reaching 76 in the year 2010. Playing games and playing music were less popular in 2006. But in the next four years over 40 owners used
this
feature
while
only around 20 people used their mobile phones to play music. There were no data about the using frequency of searching the internet and recording videos in 2006, and they both experienced a sharp increase from 2008 to 2010, of 8 and 26 respectively.
Overall
, making calls enjoys the most popularity in all three years(around 100)
while
playing music and recording videos are not popular choices.
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