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Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#forms #communication #email #amount #time #people #friends #effect #lives
Nowadays the forms of
communicaion
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communication
 are developing and expanding. There are a lot
new
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of new
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 ways
such
 as email,
messangers
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messages
 and social media.
This
 case has a lot of
goods
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good
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and effective
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effective
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effects
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 and a lot of negative.
To begin
with
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 the fact that today you can write from everywhere in the whole world.
For example
, when someone goes to
jorney
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journey
, he can stay in touch with
parents
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his parents
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 or partner. 
Also
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 you can stay closer
with
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to
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 the person you like. Chating- is the best way to do it. 
On the other hand
, people start to
prefer
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 stay home and write a message
instead
 of going to
the
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a
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 party or
meet
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meeting
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. Communication is a really
nessesory
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necessary
 skill, because it helps people to be happy, stay
succesful
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successful
 and have careers realisation.  To my
opinion
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,opinion
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 we live in 21
centure
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century
 and internet communication became a big part of our
lifes
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lives
.
However
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 it makes networking between people easier, faster and
effective
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more effective
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.
Also
 sometimes helps
developing
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develop
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 business and
using
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use
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 some products. So I think, that it influences
on
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apply
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our life better, that good be.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • modern forms of communication
  • email
  • messaging
  • reduce
  • amount of time
  • see friends
  • social lives
  • technology
  • communication
  • faster
  • convenient
  • stay in touch
  • connect
  • online
  • social media platforms
  • meet new people
  • face-to-face interactions
  • maintain relationships
  • excessive reliance
  • social isolation
  • digital communication
  • emotional depth
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