The graph below shows the percentage change in the number of international students graduating from universities different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006

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The bar chart illustrates how many foreign students passed out from the universities located in several Canadian provinces over a 5-year period of time from 2001 to 2006. The X-axis shows the percentage

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the Y-axis gives data on different states in Canada.

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in 2001, the highest number of students were from New Brunswick university

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the least was from Manitoba.

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, when compared to 2001 number of overseas graduates increased in all the Canadian provinces in 2006 except for the University of Alberta where a declining trend can be observed. In 2006, the highest number of people were from New Brunswick which was closer to 12%.

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, the second largest portion of the students from other countries was in British Columbia in the year 2006 which was around 10%

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it was about half of that in 2001.

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, in 2001 and 2006 , percentages are the same in Manitoba and Newfoundland and Labrador which

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around 4% and 6% respectively.

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The graph below shows the percentage change in the number of international students graduating from universities different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006

nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for companies and organization.

Large businesses have big budgets for marketing and promotion and as a result, people gravitate towards buying their products. What problems does this cause? What could be done to encourage people to buy local products?

Many people argue that in order to improve educational quality, high school students are encouraged to make comments or even criticism of their teachers. Others think it will lead to a loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

You recently spent the night at an expensive hotel. There was a problem with room, but the hotel staff was unable to do anything about it. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In you letter 1 Introduce yourself 2 describe the problem 3 say what you would like the manager to do.