Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.

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Some people say that parents should encourage their
children
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to take part in
group
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activities
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in their free time. Others say that it is important for
children
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to learn to do things on their own. As always, opinions are divided again in every situation. Today, I would like to
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these ideas with you and tell you a little bit about what I myself think.
To begin
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with,
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activities
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help
children
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a lot in socialising. And no one can deny that it is incredibly important. Because the better a
child
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is socialised from the very
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beginning
, the easier it will be for him to build relationships with people, agree and basically live in
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in the future. In
adition
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addition
, if a
child
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attends
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group activities
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group
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activities
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, he or she will learn another important skill, namely teamwork.
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will
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help him or her in life. After all, everyone needs to work as a team one day.
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, teamwork is not always a good thing and there may be conflicts. But
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all,
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is not
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a bad thing, because your
child
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can learn to
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deal
with these conflicts from an early age. But there is
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another point of view, which is that it is very important for
children
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to learn to
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occupy
themselves. On the one hand,
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is not a bad idea either,
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, it will teach the
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to be independent and to solve their problems on their own. It will
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undoubtedly take up less of the parents' time in dealing with their
child
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. But when you think about it, wouldn't it be lonely for the
child
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? I think it probably will.
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why I am inclined to think that it is important to take
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to different
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activities
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. In conclusion, as always, it is
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impossible
to say which of the two opinions is more correct and right. Everyone is different and everyone chooses their own way of raising
children
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.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • occupied
  • organized
  • group activities
  • benefits
  • social
  • teamwork skills
  • interpersonal skills
  • friendship
  • discipline
  • time management
  • interests
  • hobbies
  • independent play
  • creativity
  • problem-solving skills
  • self-reliance
  • explore
  • discover
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