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The provided pictures compare the layout of student rooms for one individual and two individuals at an Australian university. It is noticeable that the room for two people is more expensive and bigger in size than the one-person room. Also, there are more amenities in room for two occupants compared to the single person room. It costs $350 per week to rent the student room for two people while the rate for single person room is much lower, at $200 weekly. Though both rooms share the same length of 6 meters, the one for two people has a width of 4 meters, which is 1.5 meters wider than the other. Both of the rooms offer basic facilities, such as study desk, television, bed and kitchen appliances. However, with more space, the room for two occupants has additional pieces of furniture, namely, two bookshelves, two cupboards, table and chairs. One extra bed and study desk are provided to better accommodate the students in the larger room.

The provided pictures compare the layout of student rooms for one individual and two individuals at an Australian university. It is noticeable that the room for two people is more expensive and bigger in size than the one-person room. Also, there are more amenities in room for two occupants compared to the single person room. It costs $350 per week to rent the student room for two people while the rate for single person room is much lower, at $200 weekly. Though both rooms share the same length of 6 meters, the one for two people has a width of 4 meters, which is 1.5 meters wider than the other. Both of the rooms offer basic facilities, such as study desk, television, bed and kitchen appliances. However, with more space, the room for two occupants has additional pieces of furniture, namely, two bookshelves, two cupboards, table and chairs. One extra bed and study desk are provided to better accommodate the students in the larger room.
The provided pictures compare the layout of student rooms for one individual and
two
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 individuals at an Australian university. It is noticeable that the
room
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 for
two
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 people is more expensive and bigger in size than the one-person
room
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.
Also
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, there are more amenities in
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a room
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room
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rooms
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 for
two
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 occupants compared to the single
person
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personal
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room
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. It costs $350 per week to rent the student
room
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 for
two
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 people
while
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 the rate for single person
room
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 is much lower, at $200 weekly. Though both rooms share the same length of 6 meters, the one for
two
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 people has a width of 4 meters, which is 1.5 meters wider than the other. Both of the rooms offer basic facilities,
such
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study
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a study
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 desk, television, bed and kitchen appliances.
However
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, with more space, the
room
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 for
two
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 occupants has additional pieces of furniture, namely,
two
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 bookshelves,
two
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 cupboards,
table
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a table
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 and chairs. One extra bed and study desk are provided to better accommodate the students in the larger
room
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.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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