The pie charts below show the coffee production, coffee consumption and the profit distribution around the world

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, the pie charts provide information on global

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consumption, the leading four countries

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world when it comes to producing

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and how its

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has been distributed among various parties.

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, Europeans are responsible for 41% of the

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Americans with 39%.

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, the sum of the percentages of Japan and the rest of the world is about 20%, which is about half of the consumption done by the Americans. Indonesia is the second largest

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producer

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South Africa ranks at the top responsible for around 44% where it got doubled compared to Indonesia. Both Vietnam and Japan are having portions of 16% and 18% respectively.

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, most of the

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comes from the deliveries in the

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industry which is approximately half of the total revenue. The remaining

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is distributed among retailers, producers and exporters. About 25% of the total

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is divided among exporters and producers

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the retailers

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share a portion of 24%.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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4 paragraphs

166 words

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