You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the changes in food consumption by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below shows the changes in food consumption by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The graph below shows changes in
amount
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the amount
show examples
of
fish
,
salt
and
meat
eaten per person per week
in
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by
show examples
Chinese people between 1985-2010.
Amount
the people the
consumption
of
fish
rose,
while
the
consumption
of
salt
fell.
In addition
,the
consumption
of
meat
, at a relatively low level,rose
significantky
Correct your spelling
significantly
during
this
period. From the
graph
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,graph
show examples
we can see that people in China overload more
fish
than either
meat
or
salt
throughout the period.
In by
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By
show examples
1985,the
consumption
of
fish
had stood at 600
grams
,
then
increased to 700
grams
in 1990.
However
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,However
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it immerse in 1995,that after rose steadily in
additionto
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addition to
reached 810
grams
in 2010 In
constrast
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contrast
,there was a consistent drop
salt
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in salt
show examples
consuption
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consumption
.
Although
it
advensed
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advanced
in 1985,it
then
dipped
steadly
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steadily
steady
and reached 300
grams
in 2010.
In
addition
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,addition
show examples
to
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apply
show examples
there was normal
meat
consuption
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consumption
.The
amount
consumed rose
steadly
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steadily
from almost 100
grams
,per person to only 90
grams
by 2010. The
amount
of
meat
consumed weekly started at about 100
grams
.By 2010 it was at the
the
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apply
show examples
same level as the
consumption
of
meat
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, fish, salt, meat, consumption, grams with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.

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