The graph below shows the changes in food consumption by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the changes in food consumption by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows the changes in food consumption by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph below shows changes in
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amount
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the amount
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of
fish
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,
salt
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and
meat
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eaten per person per week
in
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by
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Chinese people between 1985-2010.
Amount
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the people the
consumption
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of
fish
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rose,
while
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the
consumption
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of
salt
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fell.
In addition
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,the
consumption
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of
meat
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, at a relatively low level,rose
significantky
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significantly
during
this
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period. From the
graph
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,graph
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we can see that people in China overload more
fish
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than either
meat
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or
salt
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throughout the period.
In by
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1985,the
consumption
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of
fish
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had stood at 600
grams
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,
then
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increased to 700
grams
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in 1990.
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However
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it immerse in 1995,that after rose steadily in
additionto
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addition to
reached 810
grams
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in 2010 In
constrast
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contrast
,there was a consistent drop
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salt
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in salt
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consuption
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consumption
.
Although
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it
advensed
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advanced
in 1985,it
then
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dipped
steadly
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steadily
steady
and reached 300
grams
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in 2010.
In
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addition
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,addition
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to
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apply
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there was normal
meat
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consuption
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consumption
.The
amount
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consumed rose
steadly
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steadily
from almost 100
grams
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,per person to only 90
grams
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by 2010. The
amount
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of
meat
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consumed weekly started at about 100
grams
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.By 2010 it was at the
the
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same level as the
consumption
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of
meat
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, fish, salt, meat, consumption, grams with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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