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some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.

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There are two types of
parents
 nowadays. The first one thinks that their
child
 must take part in social life and activities. They are always trying to put their
child
 in different areas. Vice versa, the
second
type
 of
parents
are
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is
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 sure that every
child
 must
to
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learn and progress himself only. So, who is right and what
type
 of
growing
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 is more productive? Let’s start
from
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 the
second
type
. I have to say that communication with other children is absolutely necessary. The baby must see other babies and understand how to get on well with them.
Otherwise
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 in
future
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 it will be a big obstacle for communication with other people. Now, let’s continue with the
second
type
 of
parents
.
This
type
 is more productive for teenagers. But when
parents
 let
them
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freedom
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 it doesn’t mean they don’t control them. It's good for teenagers when you have a lot of possibilities of what to do and they can decide
whom
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 they want to be in future. I’m sure that my growth was as good as it must be. When I was 4 years old my
parents
 always put me in different sections where I had enough possibilities to communicate with different people.
Then
 when I become a teenager I concentrate more on myself and forget about
social
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 life. My
parents
 agreed with me and weren’t against it. We can see that both types of
parents
 are right but
in
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 different times of growing up. When their
child
 just started growing up the first
type
 will be more productive. But when It’s time for teenage life the person must be growing up himself, so the
second
 variant is correct in
this
 case. That was my opinion about
this
 topic. Let me know if you agree or disagree with me. Best wishes, Artur
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • occupied
  • organized
  • group activities
  • benefits
  • social
  • teamwork skills
  • interpersonal skills
  • friendship
  • discipline
  • time management
  • interests
  • hobbies
  • independent play
  • creativity
  • problem-solving skills
  • self-reliance
  • explore
  • discover
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