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The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts illustrate how many types of virtual
games
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 were sold in the world (mobile, phone, console and handheld
games
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), from 2000 to 2006.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the market of Handheld
Games
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 was by far, the most profitable market,
while
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 the other three types of
games
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 were twice as low.
According to
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 the bar chart, Handheld
Games
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 reported the highest number of sales, accounting for almost 12
billion
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 in 2000, which increased to 18
billion
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 dollars by 2006. Console
games
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 were the only category that suffered a steady drop by 2006, starting from 6
billion
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 and decreasing to 3
billion
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.
In contrast
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, Mobile Phones and Online
Games
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 had an almost similar tendency. Both trends reached the global market respectively in 2001 and 2003 (2
billion
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) and reported equal sales in 2004. No mobile phone
games
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 sales were reported between 2000 and 2001. Clearly, the most impressive dates were made by The Handheld
Games
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 which in 2000 sold out about double in comparison to the other
games
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words games, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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