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The graphs show percentage of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs show percentage of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table reveals how many people used
smartphones'
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smartphones
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 each function in form of
percentage
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percentages
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 in three separate years; 2006, 2008 and 2010.
Overall
, almost all
of
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the
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apply
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people used their mobile
phone
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phones
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 for calling throughout these years
while
 other features gained
its
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apply
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popularity with the passage of time. The most remarkable data standing at 100% can be seen in the
catagory
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category
 of calling in both 2006 and 2008,
although
 it only recorded 99% in 2010.
Additionally
,
function
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functions
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 regarding
immidiate
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immediate
message
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messages
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 and pictures
also
 held high popularity in their proportion, both of
whom
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 grew by 6% to 79% and by 10% to 76% in the final year compared to
initial
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 year, respectively.
Likewise
, net surfing became one of
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major activities which
was
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 done by about 73% of users in 2010,
nevertheless
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 its function had not held by mobile
phone
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phones
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 in 2006.
Besides
, people
also
 used their
phone
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phones
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 for
recriation
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recreation
such
 as playing games and music.
Although
 both
figure
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figures
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 started from
similar
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a similar
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 ratio at 17% for
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the game
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game
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games
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 and 12% for music,
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