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COMPLETING UNIVERSITY EDUCATION IS THOUGHT BY SOME TO BE THE BEST WAY TO GE A GOOD JOB. ON THE OTHER HAND, OTHER PEOPLE THINK THAT GETTING EXPERIENCE AND DEVELOPING SOFT SKILLS IS MORE IMPORTANT. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

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Some believe that getting a
university
degree
 is the best way to secure a decent
job
.
While
 others think that gaining
experience
 and skills is vastly more important.
This
 essay will explore both viewpoints and I will share my personal opinion on the topic. Obtaining a
university
degree
 has proven to be a good way to secure a good
job
 for many reasons. The employment market is very competitive.
Job
 applicants need to display their knowledge and skills to be hired. Presenting a
university
degree
 guarantees a level of knowledge to the employer. especially if the
job
 requires a high level of skills and technical
experience
. On top of that, Many
jobs
 do not even accept applicants without a scientific
degree
. These
jobs
 mostly are well paid and worth studying for like
jobs
 in the healthcare and engineering sectors.
On the other hand
, some believe
experience
 to be more important than a
university
education
. In recent years, many big companies abandoned the requirement of
university
 degrees. A recent report showed an increase in the percentage of employees without a
university
degree
. Another study demonstrated that more
university
 graduates are struggling to find
jobs
. On top of that, a
university
education
 usually tends to be more general and does not prepare the student for a specific
job
. In conclusion, many still believe that a
university
education
 is vital for getting a well-paid
job
.
While
 others think that
experience
 is more important. I agree with the
later
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 point of view partially. I still believe that for some specific
jobs
, a
university
education
 is required.
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