The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.

The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.
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The first
chart
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shows the percentage of housework that
males
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and
females
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do. The second
chart
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illustrates the average time spent on housework by
males
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and
females
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. In the first
chart
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, we can see that in cooking and cleaning,
females
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have more percentage than
males
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by almost 20
percent
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in both of them. In pet care, there are almost the same numbers for both of them, but in house repairs, men have more percentage than women with approximately 20 and 10
percent
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per cent
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. In the second
chart
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,
females
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spend approximately an hour and a half on cooking
while
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males
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spend on it 60
minutes
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. The same situation is with cleaning.
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women spend on it about 70
minutes
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, men spend 50
minutes
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on it.
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, the time on pet care, which both
males
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and
females
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spend, equals around 20
minutes
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.
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, men do house repairs almost 3 times more than women.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, males, females, minutes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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