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the charts below show the number of university students in a particular country and how much the government spent on each student between 1984 and 2009 as well as the financial condition of the student's families. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

the charts below show the number of university students in a particular country and how much the government spent on each student between 1984 and 2009 as well as the financial condition of the student's families. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The
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 charts illustrate
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how many students go to study at university
while
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 their studies are subsidized by the government between 1984 and 2009 in
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nation
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.
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, throughout the period from 1984 to 2009, there was an increase
steadly
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steadily
 in the count of learners. As
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observed from the chart, in 1984, people who
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 at university accounted for over 150000.
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this
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 figure was sharply increasing to 250000
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 the expenditure
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 subsidization for
student's
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students'
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 families
drammatically
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dramatically
 fell
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 12500.
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decade number of the students increased steadily and the government's spending
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per student experienced drastically decreasing.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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