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Some people say that history is one of the most important subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history.

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It is generally believed by some that the importance of teaching
science
 and
technology
 in school is more than other
subjects
 like
history
while
,
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others claim that
history
 is one of the particular school's
subjects
. I opine that neither
science
 nor
technology
 could be in
higher
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 position rather than any
subjects
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subject
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 including
history
. Some
people
 think that some lessons must have priorities above
history
 .
Science
 and
technology
 which are called future lessons are playing a significant role
on
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 innovation and invention. Inventing new objects or methods could help
people
 directly to comfort their lives .
This
 relaxation is considered
as
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a beneficial phenomenon which can stand above
history
 .
On the other hand
, some
people
 argue that
history
 is vital for human life which can put it as one of the important educational
subjects
 and I agree . Reviewing past human lives is essential because ancestors had committed some mistakes and knowing these may avoid
people
 from repeating them. If
people
 reduce making mistakes , they can move forward faster which may lead them
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advancing
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 life patterns. Obviously, more achievements may be a big step toward having
better
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 life .
Moreover
,
history
 is an ancestral tale about
people
 who had done sacrifices or criminal commitments .gathering data whole over them make
make
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their memories unforgettable. Always remembering good
people
 and
also
their
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 great influence
of
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 their activities on human beings
,
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may make the feeling of caring and kindness stronger in
people
's hearts .
As a result
 of
this
 emotion,
people
 will be encouraged to behave
similar
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 to their delightful ancestors which could improve
the
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social behaviours in public .
To sum up
 , there are various views about
this
 occasion, but in my opinion,
although
science
 and
technology
 are essential in nowadays world,
it's
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 importance could not
be places
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 above the
history
among
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 scholastic lessons .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural heritage
  • innovation
  • critical thinking
  • economic development
  • technological literacy
  • well-rounded education
  • societal reflection
  • workforce readiness
  • climate change
  • comprehensive understanding
  • fostering continuity
  • rapid changes
  • integrate
  • interdisciplinary approach
  • contextualize
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