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The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.
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The chart below illustrates the expenditure on three categories between five age groups in the United Kingdom in 2004. The main feature of
this
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 chart is a group of
people
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 from 61 to 75.
People
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 under 30
years
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 old spend about 15 per
cent
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 of all of their
money
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 on restaurants or hotels and from 6 to 7 per
cent
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 on
food
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 and
entertainment
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.
People
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 between 31 and 45
years
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 old almost all the time try to spend their
money
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 more rationally and less amount of
money
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 on the
entertainment
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 part of their life. they spend almost the same
money
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 on both restaurants and
food
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 or drinks.
People
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 who are in the category of 46 to 60
years
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 old use their budget mostly on
food
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 and less on hotels and funny stuff. Talking about more adult
people
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 who are between 61 and 75
years
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 old spend more than 20 per
cent
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 of their
money
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 on
entertainment
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 and 20 per
cent
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 on
food
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 and drinks.
People
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 who are over 76
years
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 old mostly buy some
food
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 and drink on almost 24 per
cent
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 of all their budget and less than 15 per
cent
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 on
entertainment
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 and hotels or restaurants.
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Linking words: Add some linking words.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, years, cent, money, food, entertainment with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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