The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.
The chart below illustrates the expenditure on three categories between five age groups in the United Kingdom in 2004. The main feature of
this
chart is a group of
people
from 61 to 75.
People
under 30
years
old spend about 15 per
cent
of all of their
money
on restaurants or hotels and from 6 to 7 per
cent
on
food
and
entertainment
.
People
between 31 and 45
years
old almost all the time try to spend their
money
more rationally and less amount of
money
on the
entertainment
part of their life. they spend almost the same
money
on both restaurants and
food
or drinks.
People
who are in the category of 46 to 60
years
old use their budget mostly on
food
and less on hotels and funny stuff. Talking about more adult
people
who are between 61 and 75
years
old spend more than 20 per
cent
of their
money
on
entertainment
and 20 per
cent
on
food
and drinks.
People
who are over 76
years
old mostly buy some
food
and drink on almost 24 per
cent
of all their budget and less than 15 per
cent
on
entertainment
and hotels or restaurants.
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