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In most successful companies some people think that communication between employers and workers is the most important factor. Other people say that other factors are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#companies #people #communication #employers #workers #factor #factors
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 that
comfortation
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confrontation
conformation
 between operatives and executives
is
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the
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 integral part
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of
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the
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apply
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profitable firms. But
other
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others
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 believe that additional aspects are more integral. We discuss both aspects and explain
own
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our own
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 views. On the one hand, at
work
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workplace
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place
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conections
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connections
 between staff members and managers provide productive output because workers discuss problems as well
provide
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own
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their own
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 experience which will
be
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increase production.
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, Apple
give
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 a chance to employees for providing their experience which helps to more profit and
motivate
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to
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employees.
On the other hand
, some mass believes in salary if company pay
a
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good cheques which
fullfill
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fulfil
 daily life needs easily
then
 they devoted to duties.
Additionally
,Workers do more
work
 with less number of hours because
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a good
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 salary.
Moreover
,corporations incline
use
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the use
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 of technology
at
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in
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work place
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workplace
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. With
this
,
Work
done
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 by new technologies .
To sum up
, communication is
most
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the most
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 productive
which
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and
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feel
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feels
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 comfortable to us at
work place
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workplace
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.
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